Chapter 1
The coming of iron man
In the story.What I reflect is iron man stood on a cliff he stepped and then he fell down cash cash cash ! he fell down and all his parts of his body was spread everywhere around the beach.Then iron man pulled back all the parts that he found but he was missing some thing it was his ear so he thought that the sea steal his ear so he walk on the sea and he started looking for his missing ear.
Hello I'm Billy Beckett from Karoro School I thought that your story was alright but a bit confusing. If you look at your blog the words are going off the page and you spelt crash wrong. I like the bit where you said that "the sea stole his ear". Keep up the good work.
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