Friday, 10 August 2018

Jackson the bear - by Peter

                               Jackson the bear

Learning Intention:we are learning to write a narrative story.
Success Criteria:I know I am successful when I can write a narrative story by using full stop,capital letters , correct spelling and in paragraph form .

Once upon a time a in a very dark deep forest,live a bear name Jackson. He had sharp teeth,big long paws,big fat belly,black eyes,big ears and hairy skin.

In the forest there was a big dark scary cave where Jackson  was tidying up his bedroom. One morning Jackson came out of his big dark scary cave to hunt lots of big fish for dinner. When he finished fishing, he went back to his big dark scary cave. 

He step on a trap in front of the entrance that belongs to the zookeeper.When he looked up a big heavy net caught him.Then a bell  ring to let the zookeeper know that they caught a big brown bear.

A group of zookeeper came and took him to the cage where there are lots of big brown bear. He saw three brown bear that looks like him. He said "hi" my name is Jackson .The three brown bear said "hi" my name is Benjamin, this is Paul and this Augustine. While they were in the cage they told every bear that Jackson is their best friend. Jackson the bear was happy because he had lots of friends.


1 comment:

  1. Hi Peter,

    It’s Leslie here, writing to you from Canada where it’s very cold and snowy. Hard for you to imagine, I’m sure! I’m a member of the Summer Learning Journey team and I notice that you've registered for the program but not completed any of the activities yet.

    There are still 3 full weeks left to participate in the Summer Learning Journey program called “The World Around Us”. Here’s the website address: I hope you’ll take a look and try some of the activities. I’ll look for your postings and write back to you from Canada.

    Meanwhile, have a really happy summer holiday!!